An Embarrassing Experience－Draft 1
Every one must have an embarrassing experience. Of course, I had embarrassing experiences, too. For example, one day, I was asked to buy bread by my mom. So I rode my bike to the supermarket. Then, when I have already found the bread I wanted, I found that I didn't bring my money. And the worse was when I wanted to ride my bike to go back home, my bike was broken! So I had to carry my bike to go back home without riding it. While I was walking, everyone in the street was looking at me. That was really an embarrassing experience, and I don't want to remember it anymore.
posted by Fanny @ 5:06 AM
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7 Comments:
"Every one must have an embarrassing experience."
You can write " Every one must have embarrassing experiences".
I think it is better.
*I was asked to buy bread*
*bread* should change *some bread* or
*breads*.
It's a bad day don't want to remember.
I had same experience like you.
One day when I went out my bike was
broken.
I carry my bike to go back home without riding it like you.
It's the same with Nana's embarrassing experience.And we don't want to remember our embarrassing experience. Don't worry, it's passed.
"Every one must have an embarrassing experience."
"Every one" should change into "Everyone".
"And the worse was when I wanted to ride my bike to go back home, my bike was broken!"
"worse" change into "worst".
You should check your bike before you go out next.
You should check your bike before you go out next.
I wish you can forget it soon. Bless you!
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