Monday, April 16, 2007

Autobiography Part1 - Draft1

My name is Weng-Fung Wang. I was born in Tainan. I am sixteen years old. There are five people in my family. My father is a erudite man, he always teaches us many practical knowledge, which tell us what to do or what should not do. My mother is such a gentle woman, she tell us that we should get along well with people, do friendly by people. My brother is a college student, he is always a helping hand in my homework. My sister is a senior high school student, I usually has an intimate talk with her. I am so lucky that I was grew up in this wonderful family.

I like to play basketball, volleyball, and badminton. I used to be a member of the basketball team in junior high. Now I am a member of the volleyball team in my class. We always win the first plase in interclass volleyball game. I think that's because everyone make concerted efforts. I also enjoy some quite activities. Such as listening to muice, reading, and so on. These kind of activities helps me to relax.

7 Comments:

At 3:27 AM, Blogger 娜娜 said...

*I am so lucky that I was grew up in this wonderful family.* should change to * I am so lucky, I was grew up in this wonderful family.*
Because *so ~that* 有因果關係的意思, in here you use it let me think it's a little strange.

 
At 11:41 PM, Blogger Phoebe Lee said...

"I am so lucky that I was grew up in this wonderful family."
應該用"that I grow up in......"
"I was grew up in this...."變成被動了

 
At 6:50 AM, Blogger Jenny said...

"My father is a erudite man," "a" should change into "an".
"she tell us that we should get along well with people," "tell" should add "s".
"I am so lucky that I was grew up in this wonderful family.
" "grew" should change into "grown".
"I also enjoy some quite activities. Such as listening to muice, reading, and so on." I think "I also enjoy some quite activities,such as listening to music, reading, and so on." is better.

 
At 5:42 AM, Blogger  said...

We always win the first plase in interclass volleyball game. What's the meaning of "plase"?

 
At 7:22 PM, Blogger Dora said...

listening to "muice" should change to "music".

These "kind" of activities helps me to relax. "kind" should add a "s".

 
At 6:28 AM, Blogger 美萱 said...

"he is always a helping hand in my homework." change into "he always gives a hand in my homework."

 
At 9:51 PM, Blogger Amanda said...

which "tell" us what to do or what should not do. tell should add "s"

 

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